Tuesday, February 21, 2006

sentance 1: Years ago my family and i used to go to the Reebok tent sale in the springtime to get sneakers for the summer.

sentance 2: The first time my family and i go to the Reebok tent sale in the springtime, i am five years old.

The sentances are similar, but i'm borowing the tense from "if you are what you eat than what am i?". I'm not really showing, i'm still telling but in a different way, i didn't really rewrite that many sentances, i mostly just changed the tense. The most change was in the first paragraph.

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